tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4473330456811722048.post2889405850258143081..comments2020-04-20T03:17:41.054-07:00Comments on As i See It: Chapter Three: ConversationPreston Smithhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05801209365107519638noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4473330456811722048.post-49386542881215711212008-11-11T10:45:00.000-08:002008-11-11T10:45:00.000-08:00You're right, I'm going to have to stock up on gum...You're right, I'm going to have to stock up on gum in my year supply! What will I do if I can't eat my daily gum?! You're funny.Courtney Curthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01723457567851560886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4473330456811722048.post-51768863829963936362008-11-10T21:33:00.000-08:002008-11-10T21:33:00.000-08:00Okay, I love that his job is to deliver the green ...Okay, I love that his job is to deliver the green little pill to everybody. That's probably going somewhere, eh? :) Um, I was a little confused by the dialogue as well. I could tell that the misspellings were on purpose, but sometimes I couldn't understand what they were trying to say at all. (example:"u say it tolking to them crepts me a litle") I can guess what I think that says, but I'm not sure. But overall, I like. As always, the imagery is great. Keep going!Katie Harveyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11175152672717629589noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4473330456811722048.post-63820270097228009562008-11-10T16:23:00.000-08:002008-11-10T16:23:00.000-08:00Aznick,thank you so much for the constructive feed...Aznick,<BR/><BR/>thank you so much for the constructive feedback... as this is a work in progress, I am hoping to get more of this! Um I don't believe I know who you are... but no matter, thank you for the feedback.<BR/><BR/>one of the main parts of this chapter is the "conversation" as it is so titled... therefore it is important that the reader is both thrown off and surprised by the conversation, I think you are right i need to make it clearer... the miss spellings are on purpose... as are the excellerateed miss spellings. but, still I need to make this more clear. Thanks again...<BR/><BR/>and Corky! thank you for being one of my biggest fans, you were the only one who asked when the next chapter will be up! Expect the next one... in less then two weeks!Preston Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05801209365107519638noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4473330456811722048.post-91563335455691092542008-11-09T19:37:00.000-08:002008-11-09T19:37:00.000-08:00Awesome! You've totally got me into this!!!! Can'...Awesome! You've totally got me into this!!!! Can't wait for chapter 4!Courtney Curthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01723457567851560886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4473330456811722048.post-58662682382710245302008-11-09T08:44:00.000-08:002008-11-09T08:44:00.000-08:00I really liked it. Especially how you described t...I really liked it. Especially how you described the city as comparable to the "windy city" made it very easy to imagine what it must look like in ones mind. I also loved the imagery of the rain falling down the window and how 22914 was just staring absently at it. I did however found the dialog between the hackers at first easy to understand but as it went on there was certain verbage that passed me. I think its supposed to be that way since 22914 couldn't completely pick up on every word but I got a little confused since it started out as if they were typing normally and then it seemed just one of the hackers started jumbling his words a bit. All around I like it and can't wait to read more.aznickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16400828948418059736noreply@blogger.com